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December Mourning by KM Zafari

Small stones tumbled down the precipice as he peered at the water below. Colder than he remembered, wind whipped the salty ocean spray against his skin. He fought back a raspy cough.
Not yet.
The last time he had gazed upon these waters, they were filled with the floating bodies of broken men, their oil-coated uniforms aflame. Explosions and screams filled his mind with smoke and fire, with the charred flesh that slid from his friend’s wrist and folded, soft and warm, inside his hand.
I couldn’t join you then, he thought. But soon. I’ll see you soon.
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Comment by Essvari on September 28, 2013 at 16:33

A prelude to a more deeper story or just a passing glance of a forgotten memory. The protagonist's pain is evident in each phrase. Superb! 

Comment by KM Zafari on September 30, 2013 at 5:13
Aww, thanks! I wrote it with Pearl Harbor in mind.
Comment by Essvari on September 30, 2013 at 11:07

Oh wow, tht's cool. This tragedy took place somewhat closer to where I am a few years ago. A fire broke out at the oil refinery at the harbour. Some suffered 60-70 deg burn and survived.. Many perished in the blast. I guess I happened to saw that in my mind when I read this..

But truly, again nice work... :)

Comment by J.M. McDole on November 13, 2013 at 15:30

I get a powerful image of an old, dying man lost in his memories of battle. He'll die of natural causes; I don't get the feeling of a suicidal person. Quite touching and very well done.

Comment by KM Zafari on November 13, 2013 at 19:11

Thanks, JM!

Storywise, that was exactly what I intended, though I think some people did read it as him being suicidal.

Thank you so much for your kind comments. I'm glad you liked it.

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