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Kodiak Moment by Lance Burson

It's the only time I ever did anything just for money. Looking at the four-inch scar on my neck brings smells of sockeye salmon and Alaskan crab. Twenty-three years is a long time but memories of three months on a Kodiak seiner get conjured.
My seventeen-year-old daughter  talks about what she wants to do in college that will be help her "get rich" as a soon as possible. I was only three-years older when I thought the same. But three dead crew members, a brutal summer, and this damn scar changed my mind. I should tell her the story.
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Comment by abbie foxton on July 14, 2013 at 9:52

This is what I love about flash, they plant a seed of vision that may not be yours, but just as real and effecting. I have now spent time on treacherous seas, extreme conditions with sweaty angry men and no end of danger. I like this Lance.

Comment by Stella Turner on July 25, 2013 at 19:17

Loved these 99 words or less. Abbie couldn't have put it better. Well written Lance.

Comment by Ashi on August 2, 2013 at 19:54

This makes me think of "Deadliest Catch."  Of course, it's a "reality" show, but I think the danger of the deep sea fisherman is apparent, and it is as well in your piece.  I like how you evoke that danger with a simple list of vivid details -- the dead crew members, the rough summer, and the scar.  It's interesting that the scar, a visual memento, makes the man recall the memories by scent, and specific ones that an experienced fisherman would recognize.  

I would've liked a bit on what made the summer "brutal," but I figure there's only so much you can write with the 99 word limit.  There's not supposed to be a hyphen in "three-years."  Other than that, solid, poignant piece.

Comment by Monica M Brinkman on August 4, 2013 at 23:40

This reader wonders if told the story, would she listen? When we are young it seems we really must learn the hard way. 

Comment by Kerry J. Hall on August 29, 2013 at 15:23
I would never associate fishing with scars, but then, I'm not a fisherman on a long hard trip..this story evokes a sort of wisdom that life is not always easy and is well written
Comment by KM Zafari on September 4, 2013 at 7:31

This story has great imagery. It also implies two storylines within the 99-word confines - the past experience and what will happen in the future with the protagonist's daughter.It also raises questions for me involving gender and gender roles, and what exactly caused that scar. Even as a vegan, I'm intrigued. Nice job.

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