Hey!! What's the story?
M. Kari Barr has not received any gifts yet
I have a story I wrote several years back in 2009 it got some good reviews but others told me to change it...I have made changes but still no takers from publishers...I would like feed back on the opening I will post the original (after some edits) as well as what I am trying now...so tear into it...
and yeah so this is essentially two chapters but some of it is the same you can scan...but help would be much appreciated in pointing out where it gets boring...…Continue
Elliana found a curious antique bottle of amber glass with brass filigrees encasing it. It must have belonged to that hobo who bumped into me, she thought. It was truly a beautiful bottle.
Upon opening it a misty cloud of purple escaped and coalesced before her eyes.
“Your wish is my command.”
“You have got to be kidding!”
“Is that your wish?”
“No, hang on I am still processing this.” Elliana looked at the now solid man standing in her…Continue
It’s a curious thing really. To be conscious and unable to move. I’ve no one but myself to speak to, as my mouth cannot even respond. But I have this curious need to narrate my demise. Being a storyteller I would dearly love to explain my situation.
I was on holiday. A small cruise line promised a more tailored and unique experience. I enjoyed visiting one island after the other, noting the similarities and differences were…