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I tear towards Earth on an endless chute, terrified and bawling. Hope has launched me on my way but at some point on the frantic journey I slow to a snail’s pace, deaf to my own screams, and sluggish, black evil burns through my soul. I am all hatred. I shoot off again and moments later slide to a halt in bright, cold light. Loud voices proclaim,

“It’s a boy! A perfect baby boy!” Hands grab me, scrub my tender skin, wrap me in something scratchy and shove me into the arms of my mother. I hate her and I scream, again and again.


A lifetime of loathing is behind me. I stare at my mother’s body on the kitchen tiles, in this place we are forced to call ‘home’. The knife handle is smooth against my palm and a pool of blood spreads viciously, viscously across the chilly floor.

Clutching the knife I force my throbbing legs up the stairs and as I climb, strip off blood stained clothes, leaving them lying on the treads like chapters of a story. Still gripping the knife I walk naked into the bedroom and stand before the full length mirror. For the first time in my life I dare to look at my body.

Disgusting. Small and ugly, red marks scuttle across my chest, thighs and arms. Cigarette burns map a life with my mother.

I hold the knife blade against my throat and slice…

…I am tearing towards Earth on an endless chute, terrified, and bawling.

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Comment by Preston Randall on December 16, 2014 at 2:25

And I thought I had an unhappy childhood... sheesh!

Comment by Sue Nicholls on December 16, 2014 at 13:29

I don't know where this came from. I dreamt the beginning and shot out of bed to get it on parer,the rest just followed.

Comment by Ronnie Capaldi on December 16, 2014 at 16:52

Wow, no holds on this full impact story. To me it had an atmosphere of anger. Ive just written a piece that was based from a dream also.(not the one on here). This is a good work. :)

Comment by Sue Nicholls on December 16, 2014 at 17:36

Thanks Ronnie. I'm glad you like it.

Comment by Elliot Black on December 20, 2014 at 9:25

That's great Sue, really enjoyed it. The darkness of the story really gripped me. Well done. 

Comment by Sue Nicholls on December 20, 2014 at 15:13

Thank you Elliot

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